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You know I see right through you
If only I knew you,
One light in your eyes,
Make your fears appear a surprise,
You’re growing thinner,
The lines are fading,
And I’m not waiting,
I’ll watch you melt,
It would be the first time you felt,
What it’s like die,
Your organs start to fry,
Bones are breaking,
And your body is still shaking,
You haven’t got a clue,
That I look right into you,
I see your lies,
I realize,
That you were nothing,
But a fragile dream,
And as reality would seem,
You can’t hold on,
To this plane,
Moaning on your deathbed
Humming a godforsaken song
You never saw me,
The one who should be
Fading away,
Still stands here today,
And if only I would say
I still see through your eyes,
And it pains me,
Oh torture of a fantasy,
You could never see,
What it means to have empathy,
Consider this my last,
Goodbye and wishes true,
Congratulations,
If only you knew.
©2004-2010 ~TornPages
:icontornpages:

Author's Comments

This is completely in my pov. I have been told I have amazing empathy. And sometimes I believe it. I tend to see what others don't, and I can really tell what someone is thinking or feeling, easily. With that you get this. Lucky you~

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:iconishmaelia:
I find this very beautiful.

I still see through your eyes,
And it pains me,
Oh torture of a fantasy,
You could never see,
What it means to have empathy,
Consider this my last,
Goodbye and wishes true,
Congratulations,
If only you knew.


This is my favorite part. You captured empathy quite well here.
:icontornpages:
Thank you very much ;_; I'm flattered.

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:iconishmaelia:
You are quite welcome.
Is there any way to add you somewhere so I can 'keep an eye' on your new diviations?
:icontornpages:
Um, yes ^^ theres an add to friends thingy. And it well leave you a message when a 'friend' does something new.

<3

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:icontornpages:
Um, yes ^^ theres an add to friends thingy. And it well leave you a message when a 'friend' does something new.

<3

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:iconsoverine-tigerhawk:
Very beautiful!!! Another to add to my favorites^^

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Commission me! Rawr!
:iconstaxu:
The rhyme scheme confuses me, but doesn't detract from the poem any because you were apparently lax with following it. The overall result is very nice, and I think I'll browse through your gallery for more gooey goody goodness.
:icontornpages:
Well, I'll be honest here. This was more of a freewrite then a poem. It just flowed. Plus I don't edit things besides grammer :XD:. And sometimes I think in odd rhymes that are just well..random!

Thanks your looking around! :heart:

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:iconstaxu:
Yeah, it's better to do it that way then force an akward rhyme in my opinion. But call me wannabe old-school, I guess.

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